Friday, January 13, 2012

One Sentence Can Make a Difference -- Blurbs (Updated)

Writing blurbs is a tricky business, no doubt. I've discussed in other posts why I changed the "Strange Bedfellows" blurb about a month after the book was published. I also discussed why I took extreme care with the "Waiting" blurb.

Well, guess what? The blurb for "Third" is changing too, by one sentence. "Third" is a multi-genre (crossover) novel, although at its core, it is a lesbian romance. No doubting it has strong sci-fi and historical fiction aspects. The original blurb didn't mention these aspects. The opinions I got back then said not to. Now, opinion (including mine) is shifting, so I added this one sentence, this one sentence only:

She is a time traveler with a tragic past.

So, the updated blurb in its entirety reads thus:
Helen Franklin is horrified when her dying father leaves her a most unusual inheritance: a woman. Furthermore, the woman, Anne, is anything but ordinary. She is a time traveler with a tragic past. Helen tells herself she does not have time for Anne. Yalia, Helen's wife, has been distancing herself from Helen for three years, and Helen needs to decide if she wants to save their marriage.

Then the unexpected happens; a romantic relationship develops among Yalia, Anne and Helen. Can the three of them figure out their lives together, especially when time might be running out for Anne?

So, anyway, I'm going to change the blurb on a few other posts here. I hope adding this sentence was the right decision! I think it was. :-)


*** UPDATED: OK, here's my new revised blurb.

Helen Franklin is horrified when her dying father leaves her a most unusual inheritance: a woman. The woman, Anne, is a time traveler with a tragic past. Helen tells herself she does not have time for Anne. Yalia, Helen's wife, has been distancing herself from Helen for three years, and Helen needs to decide if she wants to save their marriage.

Then the unexpected happens. A romantic relationship develops among Yalia, Anne and Helen. Can the three of them figure out their lives together, especially when time might be running out for Anne?


I deleted "Furthermore, the woman, Anne, is anything but ordinary." because it was not necessary anymore to say Anne was anything but ordinary. Time travelers aren't exactly ordinary, as far as I know. :-)




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